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A meme for the pesky pea

Gakked from barbarienne atfrigg's persistent insistence:

The rules:

1. Go to page 77 (or 7th) of your current ms
2. Go to line 7
3. Copy down the next 7 lines – sentences or paragraphs – and post them as they’re written. No cheating.

Pg 77 of The Bitter River, in all its roughness:

After the boys were particularly rowdy in class, the Persian tutor made them write a report of why they had been acting up and how they might comport themselves differently in the future given the same set of circumstances. My father wrote a strictly accurate account of the morning, but Ahmed’s copy, like his speech, was peppered with falsehoods. Five times the tutor made him rewrite the account, threatening him with a lashing for each fib, but Ahmed could not relate only the facts.

In a fit of rage, he wrote in French, to the same effect. More lies, more lashes. However, when my father jokingly said that the Persian tutor’s English was poor and he would surely not be able to catch any errors in Ahmed’s telling, a curious thing happened. Ahmed was able to tell the truth. He burst into tears, and it took my father all of a day to understand that he was happy and not upset.

Comments

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frigg
Jun. 7th, 2012 09:59 pm (UTC)
Evilness? Geez. Here I gently and lovingly encourage you to do the things you mention you want to do.

I call it the friendly cure to procrastination. ;)
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 11:49 am (UTC)
Oh, Pea, you crack me up. If anything your outlook on the world and your function within it is entertaining. :P
frigg
Jun. 7th, 2012 10:00 pm (UTC)
And that is a seriously good snippet. You *know* I'll be on your back to finish TBR now, right? Mwhahahahaha
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 11:50 am (UTC)
hehe. You see good, I see something in serious need of revision. But it is cool to look at it with new eyes and to be able to see how it can be improved.
pjthompson
Jun. 7th, 2012 11:32 pm (UTC)
It paints a lovely picture of these two boys, though!
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 11:51 am (UTC)
Happy to know that since what Ahmed is at last able to tell plays heavily into the rest of the story, setting many characters down an inevitable, unenviable road. :D
pjthompson
Jun. 8th, 2012 04:33 pm (UTC)
Ah, sunshine and roses! ;-D
asakiyume
Jun. 8th, 2012 02:04 am (UTC)
When and where is the story set?
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 12:50 pm (UTC)
O what a question!

(oh, hi again; I went off on a wander through my old posts about this story. :P)

Here is an entry that gives you some detail, probably more than you wanted to know! http://mnfaure.livejournal.com/144781.html

Apart from the Middle Eastern bulk of the story, I will also have passages from the Northeast in the States and some from ships logs in the Aegean Sea...

The things I need to know...makes my head hurt. I didn't even want to post this because I know the voice and vocabulary choices are not right yet for the time period. :-
clarentine
Jun. 8th, 2012 01:07 pm (UTC)
Let's hear it for exotic settings requiring years of research to properly write about! ::sprains tongue tucking it into cheek::
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 01:34 pm (UTC)
If I could reach that tongue of yours, I'd give it a good yank. :P
asakiyume
Jun. 8th, 2012 01:14 pm (UTC)
Oh thank you for this link! And no worries re: tone and so on. I find it *extremely* intriguing, and I understand that anything is subject to change.

(P.S. I haven't forgotten my promise, either... )
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 06:53 pm (UTC)
(P.S. I haven't forgotten my promise, either... )

Never fear. I am patient.
asakiyume
Jun. 8th, 2012 03:23 pm (UTC)
(returning from reading the 2008 entry)

Whoa--you have set yourself a complicate project, but man, it will be **excellent** when you're done.
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 05:23 pm (UTC)
And I didn't even mention the murder, betrayal, and the family curse! :P
asakiyume
Jun. 8th, 2012 06:16 pm (UTC)
Can do without those :D
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 06:54 pm (UTC)
That icon says, "No can do. Gotta have 'em!"
asakiyume
Jun. 8th, 2012 11:14 pm (UTC)
LOL, and of course, that was the world's biggest typo, because I meant to type CAN'T do without those.
renakuzar
Jun. 8th, 2012 05:12 pm (UTC)
i likes, makes me curious this does.....
mnfaure
Jun. 8th, 2012 06:41 pm (UTC)
"Tis a good, good thing to rouse another's curiosity...when one is a writer, that is. :P
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